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6am:         Rising to crackled reception,
                I breathe,
                stomach rising
                and falling,
                this, the mimicked serenade to sunrise,
                performed the whole world over.


8am:         In the kitchen,
                stale bread
                and a coffee cup
                invite me to breakfast.

                Reading headlines,
                I count morning on both hands,
                four espresso ribbons,
                draped over the pages,
                filling where ink cannot.

12pm:       I lie on the small square of grass
                looking up into the apex of cerulean.

                Up on the gutter,
                sits a bird, still,
                below thick down,
                ticks suck out birdsong.

                This world,
                one of quiet tragedy.

3pm:         In the supermarket
                I watch people stocking up,
                each in a daze of commercial hysteria.

                They gather,
                these mindless fools,
                along rows of canned food,
                waiting for the first drops of New Jerusalem.

                Those first drops,
                that will explode this Babylon of polished floor.

5pm:         It’s raining outside,
                I look through an ocean curtain.


6pm:         There is silence at the dinner table,
                as I eat alone,
                except for sounds of car horns
                and the buzzing television set.


8pm:         The horizon now, is an old war photograph.

                Rooftops; the sharp no-man’s-land of lower sky.

                Clouds; mustard gas, gathering.


10pm:       I sleep.

                Men,
                screaming in the streets,
                cry tears of insanity,
                high above them
                novas smile,
                like tumors.

                All the air is violent;
                a dark storm of carnage.

8am:         I rise again,
                but in the past,

                                                “Ouvrir vos yeux”,

                                says a voice I haven't heard in forever.


                I turn and watch her raise her hands.

                She turns to me and whispers

                                                                                “Saisir le jour”.
©2005-2009 =Barnaby
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Author's Comments

having found this [link] by

i studied the structure then infused it with the style of the beat poets, war poets and then finally put in ideas of my own

i'm hoping it creates a journey - it was a poem i wrote over the course of a day, on each hour noted

'Ouvrir vos yeux' - 'open your eyes'

'Saisir le jour' - 'sieze the day'

again, credit goes to ~pavillion for the inspirational style


oh and the girl at the end is my old girlfriend, her name was Elizabeth, probably still is.

Daily Deviation

Given 2005-02-16

nova smile by ~Barnaby

A day filled with routine, war, and longing. To say the least. (Suggested by =kaujot and Featured by !ndifference)

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:iconmeggcup:
wow, that's a brilliant style. It's really powerful. The different times sectioned out really drag you along right to the end. I love your imagery- you have a way with words that really amazes me.

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ticktock..
:iconbarnaby:
thanks, i'm told that often and still don't believe it ;)

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"No doubt I shall go on writing, stumbling across tundras of unmeaning, planting words like bloody flags in my wake."
—Cain's Book - Alexander Trocchi

:jester:
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yo this makes me utter words of happiness and fulfillment. i dig this style of writing and have adopted it myself. i hope you continue to write like this, it is an awesome way of making things flow and stick

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i surrendered my beliefs and found myself at the tree of life, injecting my story into the veins of leaves, only to find that stories, like forests, are subject to seasons
.saul williams.
:iconbarnaby:
thanks

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"No doubt I shall go on writing, stumbling across tundras of unmeaning, planting words like bloody flags in my wake."
—Cain's Book - Alexander Trocchi

:jester:
:iconkaujot:
This is sublime. I can't find a fault.

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This never happened. It will shock you how much it never happened.
:iconbarnaby:
surely there is fault.

I am debased.

thanks for the comment.

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"No doubt I shall go on writing, stumbling across tundras of unmeaning, planting words like bloody flags in my wake."
—Cain's Book - Alexander Trocchi

:jester:
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thats cool..:+fav:

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Drive safely
:iconbarnaby:
thanks.

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"No doubt I shall go on writing, stumbling across tundras of unmeaning, planting words like bloody flags in my wake."
—Cain's Book - Alexander Trocchi

:jester:
:iconflying-object:
thanks :P

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Drive safely
:iconinebriate:
This is sublimely superb.

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